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Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued by many that the use of animals for the purpose of medical inquiry for the betterment of human being is right while others believe it is unacceptable. In my opinion, while I believe the usage of animals for medical investigation is a good idea because it saves humans from being treated in a barbaric manner for medical purposes, I
also
 agree that it is detrimental to the existence of the subject animals. Humans have been used in the past for several medical inquiry projects that are seen to be inhumane as they caused permanent damage to their lives. Because of
this
, it is better to explore animals for medical researches.
Furthermore
, the adoption of animals for exploration will help scientist to accurately develop vaccines and medicines without causing great harm to the subject animals unlike humans.
For instance
,
ananalysis
Suggestion
an analysis
 for the cure of syphilis was conducted on 400 men and women, 200 were infected with the virus without their consent so as to monitor the progression of the disease and they were left untreated. The prolonged presence of the disease led to permanent loss of sight and deafness in the 200 persons.
As a result
 of
this
 probe, medical personnels began testing drugs and vaccines on animals in the bid to curb the barbaric act on human lives.
However
, using some certain animals for medical exploration has been found to be detrimental to their existence as it could lead to the extinction of
such
species
.
For example
, the US bio-research program showed that specific animals whose
species
 are rare and have been used for medical research that causes gene mutations are now unable to procreate.
This
 development would lead to extinction once the remaining breed dies. In my opinion, it is
therefore
 advisable that animal
species
 that are abundant should be used for research. In conclusion,
although
 the need of animals for medical investigation is harmful to their being, I am of the opinion that animals of bountiful
species
 should be used for research purposes
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ethical considerations
  • moral dilemma
  • animal rights
  • alternative methods
  • computer modeling
  • in-vitro testing
  • medical breakthroughs
  • vaccines
  • treatments
  • stringent regulations
  • minimization of suffering
  • humane treatment
  • scientific validity
  • biological similarity
  • applicable results
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