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Some people think that it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree?

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Emphasis only on technical subjects which are related to good jobs has become a
first
 priority of people.
Therefore
, the majority of people reckon that parent education should be taught in schools so that they can become better parents in their
future
. I completely agree with
this
 rubric and will discuss points in the upcoming paragraphs. Proponents of parental education postulate that having learnt
this
 training, not only will students know about the responsibilities of their
future but
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future, but
also
 will become responsible and good parents after getting married.If children will have knowledge about the
future
 journey and their pupils. Student, after getting married, may guide their juveniles on the right path which may lead to a peaceful and educated society because despite having lived a whole life in children, people do not have an understanding with them.
As a result
, pupils start doing antisocial activities and become a part of the criminal world which can jeopardize the lives of children and
also
 will eradicate the peace and love into the community. Apart from
this
, parents are the
first
 teachers of children.
Thus
, it is quite essential to learn parental education. Having learnt
this
 training, parents can have an understanding with children and pupils may share their views or problems openly with parents because sometimes juveniles do not share personal matters due to parents fear which may lead to child sexual abuse. For illustration, a survey conducted by Oxford University showed that 65% of children have been the victim of sexual abuse by criminals in India because they did not consult with their parents. Self-evidently, these are the points which prove that parental study is quite lucrative. To conclude, having discussed
this
 point of view, I convinced to say that parental learning must be taught in institutions so that they do not face difficulties in
future
 and lead to a peaceful society.

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