Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view

Extreme recreational games like skydiving and skiing are very risky and should be prohibited.
Although
these games are good healthy activities, there are some dangers involved. In my opinion, I disagree with the prohibition. Skydiving and skiing
is
Suggestion
are
an important exercise which promotes physical activity and can
also
be for fun. Promotion of
this
is necessary as it aids in blood circulation, maintains good health, helps to burn energy and tones muscles. According to research work carried out by Westfield University in 2016, it was listed as a way of keeping fit.
Therefore
Accept comma addition
Therefore, this
this
game should be encouraged and taught properly to interested individuals.
However
, there are some dangers encountered if proper care is not taken
such
as
fall
Suggestion
falls
a fall
from height. In a case of minor mistake the person could
fall leading
Accept comma addition
fall, leading
to spinal cord injury which could
paralyze
make powerless and unable to function
paralyse
the individual. Skydivers can be injured by faulty parachutes, but more often it is the result of human error, 
for instance
, in my 5th year of nursing school, I managed a paraplegic patient and
this
was caused
as a result
of
fall
Suggestion
a fall
the fall
from skydiving. It is advised that proper measures should be taken to avoid
further
occurrence. To sum up, the health benefits outweighs the setbacks which is man made and can be avoided, so there is no need for the game to be barred.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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