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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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technology
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 has gifted us a variety of products like internet, computers, multimedia products, applications, and software that are altering various aspects of our lives and governing our activities at home or at work place. There are advantages that dominate over disadvantages, but In my opinion, I do not fully agree
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 the statement as there have been cases of exploitation of the
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Technology
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. The research in different domains of
information
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technology
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 had been insatiable till now, providing inevitable advantages. The computers made our lives efficient and convenient in many aspects. For illustration, it has become a powerful tool for the students in their study purposes and for working professionals in their jobs.
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, the applications and the computer softwares that are subsets of
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 benefited in analysing and channelizing various facilities in government as well as in private sectors.
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, the multimedia products like projectors, printers, cameras et
cetera
a particular society at a particular time and place
culture
 has
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 smoothened our daily activities in schools, colleges and work spaces. But everything that comes into existence brings disadvantages along with it.
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, there had been misuse
of the
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of, the
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. Many times, rumours and false
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 had been spread out by means of the applications or multimedia platforms, leading to enormous threats to public.
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 to it, sometimes with the help of
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the internet
,
security servers
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security, servers
 have been
high jacked
take arbitrarily or by force
hijacked
highjacked
, leaking the confidential data for cross border terrorism.
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, overuse of the
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 has increased our dependency on gadgets and slowly degrading our own capabilities to execute
works
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the works
. After analysing pros and cons of the
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, I can say that, there are more benefits over
flaws but
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flaws, but
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 doesn’t mean that we overlook the disadvantages and harness it recklessly. Utilization of anything within limits
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has been
 always beneficial.
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