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More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?

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 due to the fact that more and more individuals tend to drink
sugar
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-based drinks, which causes dangerous problems with health, The main reason of
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 harmful trend is the fact that
sugar
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 works as a drug because it is addictive?
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he majority of people can not stop to drink drinks with
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Such
s cola, Pepsi and so on. It is obviously that if a person overuse
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 in his diet, he will have trouble with health in the future.
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digestion problems and so on. The
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 significant reason of
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the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)
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-fully drinks, Because both classical water and unhealthy drinks cost approximately the same, due to
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 reason all members of so
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an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
ave the opportunity to buy it. On top of that, drinks with
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 are advertised everywhere a lot,
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 people always remember about it. When it comes to solutions to
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Government
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the availability
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this drink
these drinks
The best way to do it is to increase the price of them because humans tend to chose cheapest products. Authorities can do it by special taxes on
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-fully food.
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 problem can be beneficial not only for the health of consumers, but
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the economy
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 is to decrease the number of advertising due to the fact that it plays an important role of
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the person or thing chosen or selected
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f drinks with
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 government should impact on reasons of it,
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 as price and advertising.

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