The obesity rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many developed countries. discuss some possible reasons for this problem and suggest solutions.

There are a number of convincing reasons why
healthcare
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health care
should be financed totally by
administration
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the administration
.
First
, since many people, especially those coming from impoverished families, fail to afford medical care,
government
’s financial support is imperative in
this
field. Specifically
,
Accept space
,
the cost of medication, treatment and medical services are prohibitively expensive, which implies that the help of
government
can save human lives.
Second
, by subsidizing the cost of medical care, the
government
can
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the responsibility for its citizens.
This
means that citizens have paid taxes to the national budget,
thus
, they are
antitled
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a titled
an titled
for basic human services provided
from
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by
the
government
, including the community health.
Nevertheless
, there are several reasons why the
government
should not pay totally for
heathcare
the preservation of mental and physical health by preventing or treating illness through services offered by the health profession
healthcare
heath care
.
First
, in order to minimize individual’s
overexploitation
to a
healthcare
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health care
system whose health problems are attributed to bad habits
such
as smoking or substance use, human should be jointly responsible for
this
area. Especially, the
government
could create unfairness to those hard-working and good- hearted citizens if the
government
fund totally, either a part or all of the costs.
Second
, if the administration fully
sponsore
assume sponsorship of
sponsored
sponsor
heathcare
the preservation of mental and physical health by preventing or treating illness through services offered by the health profession
healthcare
heath care
, it can put a heavy burden on
national budget
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the national budget
national budgets
as ministries have to investments in many fields to develop the nation.
This
means that people should share the national budget burden
with
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to
the
government
for a beautiful country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dramatically
  • prevalence
  • addictive
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • screen time
  • gadgets
  • exertion
  • awareness
  • balanced diet
  • incorporate
  • nutritional education
  • facilitating
  • impose
  • regulations
  • restricting
  • promote
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