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The best way to solve world's environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion.

#world #cost #fuel
As many people are
concerning
Suggestion
concerned
 the environmental
issue
 in a lot of countries. According to some people, raising
price
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the price
 the
fuel
 is the best
way
 to tackle these problems. In my opinion, there are another
way
 of dealing with
this
issue
 rather than increasing the price of
fuel
 and I do not think that it is the best
way
. I will elaborate some reasons and I give my thoughts. In the
first
 place, if the government
make
Suggestion
makes
 a regulation to increase the cost of
fuel
, there is no guarantee that the number of people with car would be reduced. Another reason is that there are a lot of ways to address the environmental problem. From my perspective, I think the solar
energy
 is the best
way
 to tackle
this
issue
.
Firstly
, it is a renewable
energy
therefore
 we cannot run out of them and the sunlight will be available for at least 5 billion years when according to some experts until the sun is going to die.
Secondly
, the expense of maintenance is fairly cheap. The initial cost of purchasing solar systems is quite
high but
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high, but
 the maintenance does not require a lot of money. To add more of that, solar
energy
 can be used for diverse purpose. It normally we can generate electricity and heat. Solar
energy
 can
also
 be used to produce electricity in areas without access to the
energy
 grid. Solar
energy
 can
also
 be integrated into materials used for buildings. To sum up, I do not agree with the ideas of dealing with an environmental problem is best solved by the
raise
a growth in strength or number or importance
rise
 of the cost of
fuel
. It does not have
guarantee
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guaranteed
 that number of people with cars would decrease and the best
way
 to tackle the environmental
issue
 is the solar power industry.
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