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Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree ?

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The bar chart gives information about the quantity of men and women who were in
further
education
 and how they studied (
part
time
 or full-
time
) in Britain in three periods (1970-71,1980-81,1990-91). Units are measured
with
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in
 thousands. Overall,
part
time
education
 was the most studied both males and females in over
given period
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a given period
the given period
. In 1990 and 1991
females which
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females, which
 were studied
part
time
education
 were more than that of males. Full-
time
education
 was the least studied
education
 both males and females. In 1970-71
males which
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males, which
 were studied full-
time
education
 were around 100.000, while females were less than
of
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for
in
 males. In 1980-81, the number of females were more than
of
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in
 males, about 200.000 and just over 100.000 respectively. Number of males
was accounted
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were accounted
 for just over 200.000, while females' number just over 200.000. In terms of
part
time
education
, in 1990-91 the quantity of females
were
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was
 more than
of
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in
 males, about 1100 thousands and 1000 thousands, respectively.

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