Some people belive that nowdays we have too many choices.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.
One the one hand, nowda
ys is t
he age of technology.Actually the help found a lot of information, the time is saved.the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
In addit
ion we can
read the news online any language from any country in the world.Accept comma addition
addition, we
Moreo
ver we can
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Moreover, we
ght onli
ne stores.We can easily talk to our long-distance friend on the online chatting.For any time the movie can get and watch Internet.
from beginning to end
through
throughout
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Moreo
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of us have a mobilAccept space
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mobile phone
Also
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rds education with the use of technology.
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approaches
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite