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All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. What problems does this cause? How can we overcome the problems of poverty?

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It is true that, in all over the world, especially in poverty stricken society, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer.
This
 essay is going to examine the causes and solutions. The gap between rich people and poor individuals in a society leads to a great deal of crimes and is not beneficial for both the rich and the poor. Generally, the one who has no income or an insufficient salary, struggles for daily vital requirements. In order to cover the expenses, they commit several crimes
such
 as snatching, drug dealing, kidnapping and so on.
Furthermore
, the children of poorer family may be humiliated by richer children at school. These children lose their self confidence and can not concentrate on the educational programs.
consequently
Suggestion
Consequently
, owing to lack of proper education, they may not be able to find appropriate job in their future life. There are several steps can be taken by government to tackle the issue.
Firstly
, the tax law should be based on every member of public's income. That means, more income should pay more tax.
For example
, the one who earns the minimum should be tax exempted.
Secondly
, the assets should not be exceeded to a certain level. If it happens, it should be taken from the wealthy and spend on public facilities and expansion.
Last
 but not least, the governments should give fair job opportunities to people. A percentage of seats should be reserved in schools, colleges and work places for the poor people. In conclusion, the gap between the rich and the poor detriments for both sides and the steps should be taken by governments to tackle
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Income inequality
  • Wealth gap
  • Socioeconomic disparities
  • Marginalized communities
  • Impoverished individuals
  • Privileged elite
  • Disparity in living standards
  • Social stratification
  • Exacerbate
  • Living below the poverty line
  • Income distribution
  • Lack of access to basic necessities
  • Food insecurity
  • Limited healthcare services
  • Education barriers
  • Socioeconomic mobility
  • Resentment
  • Economic disparities
  • Resource allocation
  • Underprivileged
  • Vulnerable populations
  • Cyclical nature of poverty
  • Government intervention
  • Multilateral cooperation
  • Empowerment
  • Progressive taxation
  • Equal opportunities
  • Social safety nets
  • Unemployment rate
  • Corruption
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