Some people believe that to give opportunities to the new generation companies should encourage high level employees who are older than 55 to retire. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, few citizens consider that senior staff has to step out at 54 years of age in order to give chance to the new employee.

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topic disagrees with an argument and believes 55 is not the right stage to retire from an employment.

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, it will discuss Senior people efficiency and recruitment.

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stability and followed by a conclusion. Industries are hiring the dynamic people who are passionate about the change and setting the 55 years of employment to the senior staffs is an inappropriate decision.

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will lead the High

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crew life which is

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effected on the employment. For an example, survey studies in U.S, people who retired early has not seen a significant life due to various reasons

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as debts, different loans to clear

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looking after family. An enterprise must understand the importance of being a senior in the

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which helps the juniors to improve the designed roles and boosts them for the

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challenging stages.

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, to bring more productivity and development in the young generations, a seniority

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is required them to learn and brings the enterprise

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to be more successful.

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, 78% of Young Indians consider that they are inspired and motivated by experienced staffs in an organization. To conclude, companies must boost the senior employees to continue their

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duties

with them and young employees must learn from the senior employee to make the

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successful. In my opinion, top

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force

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level

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must be extended to be fair and reasonable.

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