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Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to state. Do you agree or disagree?

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As the majority of people claim that the money, which is earned by us, must not be given to
government
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 a kind of duty
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 others are opposite with
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 approach. I firmly disagree with individuals should not pay taxes to the state.
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 system
has been going
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has gone
 on in the world since the beginning of civilization. Countries and their institutions totally depend on money, which is called
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 in the modern world, must be taken from people, who live there. To illustrate, a state might invest its military and buy various vehicles
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 as a fighter jet or cannon. None of them are possible without any
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. What is more, If people want to live in a peaceful, they should respect the country’s rules.
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other different
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other, different
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also
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, areas are particularly important
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 as health, education or transporting system. Because the
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 runs the basic places from the taxes it collects.
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, states or governments do not keep up with development, if there is no
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 assistance.
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, many people may not be willing to pay taxes.
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 is because they blame to
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 like lack of poverty, employment or infrastructure.
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, they believe a system that
the richer
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the rich
 person has to pay the more.
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, countries must solve
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 problem and put a solution forward to satisfy their fellow citizens.
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, the chaos shows up itself. To sum up, there is no doubt that
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tax
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the tax
 is a oxygen for states. The duty of every citizen supports the
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, which uses it for
public interest
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the public interest
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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