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Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Opinions are divided as to whether some stringent regulation on
noise
 is to be set or not. Personally, I hold the view that it would be much better if there were
such
 rules. In
this
 essay, both views will be examined in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of an introduction of
noise
 restrictions. Some may assert that it is a personal freedom to create
noise
 as much as they wish. Many, especially young people, derive a great pleasure from listening to a load music while driving a
car
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car, for
for example
, or people can relieve their stress by shouting or breaking everything around to their heart’s content.
However
, I believe
such
 practice negatively affects others and
hence
 serious measures should be taken to prevent
this
. It is incumbent upon authorities to introduce strict regulations on high volumes of
noise
 raising many concerns.
Noise
 pollution, by definition, is harmful to personal psychological and physiological conditions. An extensive exposure to a loud music,
for instance
, entails hearing impairment both for immediate listener and people
near by
close at hand
nearby
.
In addition
,
families particularly
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families, particularly
 with young children under
such
 condition can be distracted from their work or cannot fall asleep. Special occasions,
such
 as festivals, concerts or parties which are
also
 a source of
noise
 should comply with the
noise
 regulations,
for example
 to be held far from residential dwellings. Having discussed both arguments, it is clear that the benefits of making unlimited
noise
 pale much in comparison with associated problems, and
therefore
 governments are called for setting severe penalties and regulations to combat
noise violation
Suggestion
noise violations
 and insure a welfare of citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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