Some parents believe that reading books for entertainment is a waste of time for children and they think that their children should only read serious educational books. What is your opinion?

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İt is claimed by a group of parents that reading books as a leisure activities are not important for their children and they should only read serious academic books. In my opinion, reading books that even
is not related to
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are related to education not having
do related to education not have
don't related to education have
is not related to education have
education
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have several beneficial effects on children and I disagree with the given statement since I believe that reading so many educational books can be boring for many children.
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of all, reading books for entertainment
provide
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provides
a good qualities and skills for children. It is irrefutable that
vast majority
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the vast majority
of children are more fascinated by
colorful
having striking color
colourful
story or legend books that involved in numerous magical or imaginary occasions. It paves the way to be more creative children and they can easily use their imagination for useful things. It has
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benefits
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benefited
in the way of their future career.
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, children who have more creative brain tend to choose IT industry and they become a
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virtual
professional in their own field.
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, if children devote a lot of time to reading books for studying, they may become reluctant to school or college. After a while they may find it too boring and feel exhausted. It may promote children to stay away from
education
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and tend to other fields that do not require mental effort or
education
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. In conclusion, parents should make a balance between
education
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and entertainment so that children do not lose their passion to study. Apart from it, reading a book for enjoyment
helps
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will help
children to be innovative and talented in the future.
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