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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered by some people that criminals should always subject to fixed punishment for certain crimes, while there are others who think that the hidden stories behind the unpleasant acts of the accused people should be taken into consideration before inflicting suffering. On the one hand, giving a fixed torture would definitely make court proceedings a lot quicker.
This
 is explained by the fact that the judges would not need to analyse the case and decide a specific type of retribution as it would have been already decided for them.
Moreover
, if felons know that there is severe and harsh discipline, even for small crimes, they are hindered and they would not attempt to commit any illegal act.
Therefore
, the crime rates would decrease significantly and
thus
 a better society will be built.
For instance
, in Iran, the sanction of stealing is cutting the robber’s hand off no matter what had been stolen.
On the other hand
, it would make more sense if the judges decide a crime, according to the situation and the motive of it because it would ensure that the convict is given a fair trial and the right trial will be handed down to him. The majority of the incarcerated people had faced a problem in their life,
such
 as childhood trauma, poverty, victimisation or mental illness.
For instance
, a mentally ill person who commits a murder would be judged
accordingly
,
instead
 of being counted like any other lawbreaker.
This
 would make the criminal justice system fair and balanced. All in all, I personally think that each crime should be assessed specifically as
this
 is becoming a very convoluted and disconcerting problem nowadays. Living in a safe environment is not outside the realm of possibility. Actions need to be done.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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