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Some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Museums and galleries have long played a vital role in preserving and representing histories and cultural values. Many people claim that it is more important to focus on local works, whereas others believe that international works are
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 of great worth. A museum or a gallery should be the place to exhibit indigenous history and culture.
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 helps people to gain a better understanding of their nation, especially provide an incisive view of the golden ages and hard times that the country has been through.
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, they instill a patriotism and national pride in the local’s mind.
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 places contribute to the preservation of traditional customs. Nowadays, many minority ethnic groups are on the verge of losing their culture, so the display of their works and artefacts can preserve them and the diversity of a nation.
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 variety of works from different countries is beneficial in some ways. People have
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 an overview of histories and artworks around the world.
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, international works help to diversify the content of galleries and museums. They’ll attract more visitors and so it supports the economy and international relations. To conclude, domestic art and historical works are necessary, but it doesn’t mean that we can deny the significance of international works. Both have their irreplaceable character and should be displayed all.
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