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You are planning a birthday party for a friend, but you need to make some arrangements. Write a letter to a friend who will be helping you with the party. In your letter: Explain the reason for the party Give details about the arrangements you have already made Explain how your friend can help Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sina, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. As you may know , it is our friend , Amir's birthday next week on Monday .
To
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 that
occasion
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 I decided to throw a party and I want him to be surprised so please keep
this
as
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apply
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a secret . The gathering will be at my place on Gisha 23rd
street
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 and it starts from 8PM to late into the night. I considered
to invite
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 at least 30 people including boys and girls and kids.
Also
 , I hired two famous
dj's
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DJ's
 to play some nice
musics
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music
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 to dance with .
Moreover
 , My mom will kindly take responsibility for cooking dinner. It will be a huge help to me if you can provide some drinks and
junkfoods
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junk foods
junk food
 and bring them with you . Plus , I need you to help the guests
with finding
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 the location and manage their entrance time so it
do
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 not interfere with Amir's
arriving
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 time . Take care, Pouria.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure all sentences are completely clear and concise to enhance clarity. Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve overall readability.
task achievement
Double-check for minor grammatical errors or typos, such as 'musics' instead of 'music'. This helps in maintaining professionalism and clarity.
task achievement
You have effectively stated the purpose of the letter and have clearly specified the reason for the party, which fits well for the task achievement criteria.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a logical structure and appropriate signposting (Dear Sina, Take care), which shows coherence and cohesion.
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