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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Many people hold a viewpoint that children spending a plenty of time on
television
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.
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, TV programmes does not play a role as a
books
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book
 in students' life.
This
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 is the reason that children are not as well-educated as
previous generation
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previous generations
the previous generation
. In my overview,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 concur that most children are occupied by parents in the family. In fact, the main resource
of
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for
 the education that student can learn from
book
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the book
books
such
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 a teaching tool for them. Almost children in many countries are being
controled
restrained or managed or kept within certain bounds
controlled
 by parents. After the duty either at school or tuitions as a
students
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student
, they
are more likely participate
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are more likely to participate
are more likely participate
 in an outdoor activities with their
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 friends.
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, there is no time left for them to watch
television
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. In spite of
this
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, if they watch the channels, it should be related to educational programmes.
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, strict parents always keep an
eyes
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eye
 on their
children especially
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children, especially
 when they access on social channels.
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, children are able to watch only when their parents are allowed.
On the other hand
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,
television
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 can never take the place of
book
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the book
 as a teaching tool. Apparently, TV channels cause the
effect especially
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effect, especially
 children eyesights.
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, children might want to watch the animated cartoons repeatedly rather than the educational programmes.
This
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 is the parents' methods to encourage their offsprings to learn quickly. In
this
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 generation, children are particularly far from the previous generation. It all depends on the individual learning and occupied parents. For
this
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 reason,
television
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 should not be blamed for pupils qualifications,
moreover
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, the understanding between the role of education and
television
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 should be educated by their parents. To sum up, children nowadays definitely interested in learning from either books or media programmes
such
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 as
television
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.
However
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, book still the main resource of children's education to achieve their academic.

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