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People who have a variety of different skills can be more successful than people who focus only on one specialized skill.

I agree with that multi skills people are more successful compared with those whom only focus in
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one
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ills .
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skill
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ople w
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People
ith different skill have more opportunities in their future .
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any companies prefer to have multi tasks employees. People with
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riety s
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varying
varied
kills they can start their
business
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 easily
also
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 different skills open many doors.
First
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 reason people with different skills are more like by many companies. It is known that companies like to hi
r p
engage or hire for work
hire
hear
hit
eople with different skills due to some reasons.
For example
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, skills like using computer-communicating teamwork are essential for many po
sitons.
the particular portion of space occupied by something
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other r
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Other
easons people with verity skills they can start their
business
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 compared with people with
one
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 sk
ills.
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skill
In general starting
business
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 required many skills it is difficult to open
business
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one
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ills .
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skill
to
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To
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the person or persons that; the one that
who
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business
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 they need to hire em
ployee t
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employees
an employee
o work with them and they have to understand di
fferent type o
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different types
the different type
f gob and skills so they can have the ability to distinguish between go
od employee a
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a good employee
good employees
nd unqualified employee.
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, different skills open many doors. People with
va
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riety s
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varying
varied
kills they can have more appointee to get promoted easily
also
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 they can work with different type of companies they will not be il
luminate b
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illuminated
y
one
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 company or two
in co
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ntrast people w
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contrast, people
ith only
one
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ills t
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skill
hey will face many difficult to have another job easily if they got fired .
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In conclusion. People with different type of skills they are more preferred at many companies
also
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 multi skills people have the ability to start their own companies or
business
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 easily and
variety
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 of skills will open
variety
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 of choice.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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