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Some people think parents should be forced to attend childcare course to learn how to take care of their children. Do you agree

#people #parents #childcare #course #care #children
In every time
parent
's knowledge and experience always have a big effect on their
child
. But now day, a lot of
parent
Suggestion
parents
 don't have the knowledge to raise a
child
; they just took their kid to school, and let the teacher take over. I think how to build a
child
 to improve their true potential is the
parent
 attend childcare courses, and it would help them to raise a youngster. So I agree a forced couples to attend a parenting course.
Firstly
, Parents influences their
child
's behaviour, growth, health, indirectly because children like a sponge they do the same things that the father or mother does. So if the
parent
 doesn't know about being a "true
parent
"
also
 their kids negative examples can be influenced to a
child
's development and can lead to bad behaviour.
Secondly
, a lot of parents, when having the
first
child
, will feel disturbed when raising their children. From take care of them when they are babies, toddler age, to choose school when they in
child
 age, how to deal with
child
 poverty. The courses will help parents learn what their
child
 needs at each developmental stage as well as prepare for the
next
 stages for them. I think if the
parent
 knows and be prepared in each stage they. Will raise their
child
 with good qualities.
Next
, I think born and raise a
child
 is very hard; when you decide to have a baby and raise them, you need a lot of courage and determination. And I think the key to be a good
parent
 is confidence, so I think to attend a childcare course not only to prepare knowledge to be a
parent
 but
also
 mentally for them. In conclusion, I believe that childcare will help parents to understand their kids and raise them in the best way.

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