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Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of the situation?

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Nowadays by using
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 modern technologies like computers and internet working from
home
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 had become easier and more convenient. Due to the use of
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 technologies the
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 spent in the office decreases and can be used for other beneficial works. There are some pros and cons of
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, which I intend to describe in the
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 paragraph. On the one hand, there are many advantages of modernization by using personal computers with Internet facilities people can
work
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 from their
home
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 and simultaneously can spend
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 with the family.
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 the working
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 in the office reduces and can be used for other beneficial works like spending
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 in developing new skills, to pursue their hobbies and many more.
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, in the recent situation entire world was suffering from a deadly disease called
covid
having or marked by a curve or smoothly rounded bend
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 19, the entire world was under the lockdown, and the people are not allowed to go out and
work
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 but people continued their
work
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 from
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 by using the computers and the internet.
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, there are some disadvantages
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. By increase in use of the computers
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 of doing
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 people get distracted and become lazy the utilise the
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 in other activities like watching movies, playing video games, in scrolling the social media sites.
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, people's life becomes more sedentary and they spend the maximum
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 in watching computers which indirectly affect their overall health.
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, it
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 leads to less human interaction, which leads to decrease in their confidence around the people. In the conclusion, I would like to pen down, saying that, the advantages overweight the disadvantages. In today's world computer and internet have made peoples
lif
a characteristic state or mode of living
life
 trouble free and can help them to manage their
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 even from
home
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.

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