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These days many people live or work overseas in a different country than they were born in. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and then give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, some living or working in another
country
 which is not their nationality.
This
 essay will suggest having chances in the development career is the biggest advantage of
this
work
 oversea, and the cultural shock will be the primary disadvantage when living there. On the one hand, having a job and
work
 oversea is an opportunity to develop yourself in your career. You can
work
, study and know the way foreign companies working. It is the chance for you to challenge yourself and if you passed it, you will self-confidence if not, you will not regret you
miss
Suggestion
missed
 a chance to prove yourself.
For instance
, my cousin has a chance to study and
work
 in
Europe but
Accept comma addition
Europe, but
 she decided to continue
study
Suggestion
studying
 and
work
 in my
country
. Now, sometimes she regrets her decision.
On the other hand
, getting shocked will be
worth
Suggestion
worthy
 thing which you will receive for the
first
 time living in another
country
. You will see many different things with your familiar. The food you
can not
can not
cannot
 eat, the laws, the music you listen to or anything other, everything so strange. A lonely feeling hems around you which makes you are
sadness
Suggestion
sad
 and cry. Take my brother as an example, he used to
work
 in Taiwan. He usually felt alone and missed family after his
work
 because he was unfamiliar with that
country
 and could not understand them. In conclusion, I believe that working oversea is an opportunity in your career development which drawback the cultural shock when you live the
first
 time in another
country
.

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