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It has been argued that gift giving should not be encouraged, because money is often wasted on things that people do not like or want. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

#gift #money #people
At various events a society has a tradition to give a souvenir;
however
,
time
 to
time
 inappropriate because useless or people do not need these things.
Therefore
, majority people think necessarily change
this
 tradition and stop to give a
gift
, while others have the opposite view. Overall, I partly agree with the topic statement because we have different events and circumstances there people can predict a
gift
.
Firstly
, few people can decline the fact that close circle of people alludes to you that they want, so the more
time
 you can buy a present without any doubt.
For example
, the close friend can demonstrate you some stuff that suit for him;
however
, he still do not buy it for different reasons.
Moreover
, people on some part of events inevitably give a present
such
 as women`s day when men present flowers and other gifts.
Consequently
, things on a souvenir need in some circumstances and events.
Although
, majority occasions when people decided to buy something universal and cheaper it make awkward situation, thereby
this
 type of
gift
 should be discouraged by feedback from who accepted a
gift
.
For instance
, in my country the tradition present bed linen or pot flowers,
nevertheless
 on chance of the allergy or useless
such
 stuff.
Besides
, if these things useless, after people are able to catch a lot of awkward moments too, because we usually ask about
gift
such
 as the meaning of receiver or why you are not using the
gift
, thereby it could lead to controversial aftermath.
Thus
, if people do not have sureness on a present, perhaps better give money in a card or envelope, or only congratulate for evading embarrassing occasions. To conclude, I cannot wholeheartedly deny a
gift
 givings because
time
 to
time
 you need to do it,
as a result
 better consider type of a souvenir or allude to ask people that they want.
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