The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.
The graph above displays the
amount
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of
sales
all over the world in five of the most popular mobile companies in the
period
from 2009 to 2013.
Overall
, there was a noticeable increase in the
sales
of both
Samsung
and Apple compared with the other three mobile brands over the five years. The chart reports that over the whole
period
, the
sales
of both
Samsung
and Apple increased.
Samsung
sold approximately 450
million
units
and Apple sold around 150
million
units
. As can be seen from the graph, there was an observable decrease in the
sales
of Nokia and LG.
Although
, Nokia's
sales
were similar to
Samsung
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Samsung's
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in 2009 as it sold around 450
million
units
but
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in 2013, its
sales
decreased significantly to
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around 200
million
items,
while
the
sales
of LG was ranging from approximately 100
million
to 50
million
units
in the same
period
. ZTE's
sales
increased slightly over the whole
period
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, period, samsung, million, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global sales
  • Mobile phone brands
  • Market share
  • Trends
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Technological advancements
  • Innovation
  • Consumer preferences
  • Demographics
  • Market dominance
  • Brand loyalty
  • Comparative analysis
  • Sales figures
  • Data interpretation
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