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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages

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There ought to be a
day
 once every
month
, where
private
Suggestion
privately
 owned vehicles are not to be allowed on the road and have a
car
-free
day
 which is thought by some individuals. Having a no private
car
day
 will lead to less traffic,
hence
 less pollution for a
day
.
However there
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However, there
 are
also
 drawbacks to be taken into account.
Firstly
, one benefit of having a no
car
day
 once a
month
 will definitely have less running cars and motorbikes on the
day
 which will reduce the emission level on the environment.
Secondly
, people who are used to go places only by private vehicle will experience the use and convenience of public transport, while saving the fuel cost at the same time.
For instance
,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 teenagers nowadays due to their high lifestyle pattern
are generally tend
Suggestion
generally tend
 to use owned
car
 and do not
wishes
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wish
 to use public services will get a chance to experience the facility.
Thirdly
, the possibility of people going to work or students going to school by
walk
Suggestion
the walk
 will increase.
This
 could
also
 result into turning adolescents towards using the government facility more often rather than just once a
month
.
On the other hand
, one problem by having
car free
Suggestion
a car free day
day
 is that council will need to arrange more buses and trains just for a
day
 every
month
 as more people will be travelling.
Furthermore
, more drivers can be needed to operate the vehicles every
month
, which again arises an issue for the government as
only required number
Suggestion
the only required number
 of drivers are available.
For example
, if 50 drivers run the buses on normal days,
then
 on a
car
 free
day
 due to high frequency of travellers the required numbers can go possibly double. Another possible issue is that workers and students travelling might face congestion into local transportation and
chances
Suggestion
the chances
 of running late to work or school may increases. In conclusion, while society can get some benefits from having
car
 free
day
 once a
month
, it can
also
 lead to congestion on vehicles or council may be required more numbers of drivers, buses or trains.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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