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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extend do you agree?

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It is argued that more funds should be expenditure on roads and motorways rather than on trains, buses and underground. I believe that both
road
 and public transport systems have a crucial role in modern society,
therefore
 they should be allocated equally.
Firstly
, roadways have good quality will increase the level of safety and reduce traffic congestion.
For instance
, many cities and provinces in Vietnam, the number of
road
 accidents is rising annually.
This
 is the
evident
Suggestion
evidence
 that
government
Suggestion
the government
 should spend money on the quality of
road
 systems in order to ensure the safety of people.
In addition
, wider roads and motorways in
big city
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big cities
a big city
 like Ho Chi Minh will help to increase
road
 capacity. There will be more space for a large number of vehicles.
Secondly
, better public transport systems are advantageous for
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 and people. It is more convenient to commute by private vehicles rather than waiting for buses and trains, which might be limited in terms of route and time.
Moreover
, we can cut down the gas exhaust and reduce pollution. Nowadays, developing countries with overpopulation will lead to increase the traffic density. So, building more public transport systems is the best solution for
this
 major problem. In conclusion, I think government should spend money on buses, trains and underground because these transports not only have less
pollutants but
Accept comma addition
pollutants, but
also
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the demand of billion commuters in the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Transportation
  • Congestion
  • Economy
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Social inclusion
  • Urban development
  • Efficient
  • Investment
  • Reliance
  • Boosting
  • Affordable
  • Private vehicle users
  • Public transport system
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