Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is often said that one cannot buy happiness with the riches.
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I agree with
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fact that being wealthy does not assure one being delightful, but at the same time there are a number of reasons of being unhappy that arise due to the shortage of money. So, I partly agree with
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statement and
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essay will reflect my reason for
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. There are a number of materialistic things in
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world that our wealth can provide us. But, being happy is a feeling that cannot be taken for granted along with the wealth. We can take examples of the celebrities like the television and the movie stars, the politicians, etc.;
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they are very famous and really rich, but very often we come across the news of these renowned personalities being depressed. In fact, if check some history, a number of highlighted personalities like Zeenat Amaan, committed suicide due to their depression that too at the peak of their carriers.
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, people often correlate the feeling of cheerfulness, solely with the availability of capital; which is totally wrong. In my experience, I have seen people complaining that they will be content once they get money but
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never happens.
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, it is often observed that the lack of funds to even cover the basic needs, become the reason of stress in many people’s lives.
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, I often observe my neighbours arguing over the financial issues, which is one of the major reasons of sorrow for them. Very often, we observe that the farmers and the poor people commit suicide or remain depressed throughout their lives failing to provide their families with the basic necessities,
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as proper food to survive and a shelter. No doubt, the cash cannot buy joy, but it can definitely help in buying the things that might bring joy in the lives of those who struggle due to its deficiency. To conclude, though I agree that funds alone cannot give the surety of merriment, but it can definitely be the reason of joy for the people those who struggle due to its unavailability.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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