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Please complete the personal statement IN YOUR OWN WORDS. You must submit the personal statement in English in the space provided below. Describe, in no more than 500 words, your reasons for applying for your chosen course of study and the ways in which you expect your study experience to make a difference to your life and those around you.

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In 2016, I
finally
 graduated from high school only to find out that college is not what I expected. There is no strict schedule or a specific pathway to the future, which means I have to start
design
Suggestion
designing
 my life on my own.
Thus
, after the school began I started to explore my interest, looking for a field that I want to dive in. It was a frustrating time. As a freshman student, I had no idea what I am capable of doing, nor do I know what I like. Luckily, by the end of the semester, there was a
design
 workshop drew my attention. Out of curiosity I signed it up. During the workshop I felt something that I didn’t have while I studied engineering. It was the
first
 time that I felt the passion lay within my heart.
However
, I struggled with whether to set my career in
design
. Staying in engineering guarantees a stable income and a smooth career path. Choosing
design
 means I have to give up all of that. Another reason of my hesitation is because at that time I didn’t actually have any experience of
design
. I wasn’t sure about my enthusiasm. In the following semester I decided to give it a shot. I selected a
design
 related course to gain more knowledge and experience. Later that year I once again challenge myself to take on a role of a
design
 teaching assistant. I constructed a course
frame work
a hypothetical description of a complex entity or process
framework
 and introduced basic
design
 methodologies and tools.
Although
 studying engineering is difficult for me, I still stayed in our department, and considered it as a complementary support for my
design
. To enhance my
design
 abilities, I selected two additional programs, which are innovation & entrepreneurship and innovative
design
. Personal Statement

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