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There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am Tanuja Mistry,
residents
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 of Vasant Vihar Colony, Central Delhi. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with the
bus
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 services
of
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in
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 our area.
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 with, we have
least
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 buses available for
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 area, and it arrives often 10 to 15 minutes late, and due to their late arrival crowd increases and two
buses
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,buses
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people
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 are riding
same
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bus
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. It causes overfull situation some
people
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 like old age
people
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,
people
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 with children and some children are not able to
manage
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 get in the
bus
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,
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consequently
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 they urge to leave the
bus
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. Due to
this
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 situation, I missed my
bus
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 more than 10 times and
unable
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was unable
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 to reach my office on time and my salary got deducted. I am distress
with
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by
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this
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 situation as I can not commute
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any other
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other
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another
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 way like
train
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a train
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 or taxi, as it cost me a lot. I believe
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 matter deserves your immediate. I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 you could increase
number
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the number
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buses
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of buses
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 in our area. Looking forward
for
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to
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 your prompt action. Yours Sincerely, Tanuja

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhering to schedules
  • inconvenience
  • daily routine
  • punctuality
  • frequency during peak hours
  • overcrowding
  • commuters
  • update system
  • reliable
  • maintenance
  • breakdowns
  • irregular bus timings
  • passengers
  • delays
  • unreliable
  • appointments
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