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Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the past few decades, the needs of
energy
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 had a significant rise, and many countries and
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 companies were exploiting
oil
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 and gas in some distant areas and natural regions. While
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 has some beneficial influences on the economy and local people, there are still more corresponding problems. On one hand, exploiting fossil
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 in natural places could pose a large threat to ecology and the environment.
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, a serious
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 spill accident happened in the Gulf of Mexico several years ago, resulting from the wrong operation within the process of
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 drilling.
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 accident led to a series of problems,
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 as ocean water pollution and mass fish deaths.
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, extensive extraction of
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 could result in an earthquake and ground sinking.
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, the relations between some countries have become increasing tense due to the scramble for
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 resources. Many developed countries heavily rely on fossil
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 to drive the economy, and they intend to hunt for
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 and gas reserves from overseas.
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 means that the scramble for
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 could be a threat to national security.
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, the increasing exploitation of
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 in distant areas can stabilize the international
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 prices and reduce the intense demand for fossil fuels, because of
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 supply rising.
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, locating
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 and gas in remote places can provide more an employment opportunities to local residents, who are likely to increase their income. In conclusion, there are more negative impacts in exploitation of
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 on the natural environment and international relations, despite some economic benefits in
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 markets.
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, it is necessary to develop more alternative
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 sources rather than fossil fuels.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • fostering innovations
  • renewable energy sources
  • energy security
  • geopolitical tensions
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental risks
  • habitat destruction
  • irreversible damage
  • perpetuates dependence
  • transitioning
  • indigenous and local communities
  • ethical and social challenges
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