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Write a letter to your friend who you recently travelled with to a foreign country. Include a) Why you enjoyed the trip b) What you are doing now c) An invitation to visit you now

#friend #country #trip #b #c #invitation #visit
Dear Priya, How are you? Hope
this
 letter bring you good health. Thank you for accompanying
with
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me
for
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 our Canada trip which we went
in
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last
 month. I enjoyed the vacation and relaxed
myself
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from the monotonous work because of your presence.
Moreover
, the
places
 which we visit help us to rejuvenate
our self
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 and are soothing to our eyes.
In addition
, the
places
 which we visit together had both adventure and peace that made our trip
to
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cherish it forever. As you know that I’m currently working
in
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 a big project and I’ve been handling the project as soon as we returned from
trip
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. It’s a migration task so we are working on a shift to complete and deliver the software within
this
 month. As a project
manager
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 I’m coordinating with my team to make
error free
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 deliverables. I would like you to invite
to
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 my home in Dubai. I know that
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month-end
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month
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 end you will be having
long
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 weekend and I’ll
also
 be free by
then
 so once you are here, we can roam and see more
places
.
Also
, I’ll arrange for your accommodation and will send you the sightseeing
places
 in UAE. Look forward to seeing you soon. Warm wishes, Saru
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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