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All over the world, the number of overweight people is growing. What do you feel are the main causes of this? What are the effects?

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Global
obesity
 rates have been swelling for several decades.
This
 is a
trend
 that continues to have devastating
effects
 on populations everywhere.
Although
 often debated, I feel the food a person eats and the lifestyle they live are the base precursors to
this
 problem. In
this
 essay, a look at these causes and their
effects
 will be made.
Firstly
, diet and lifestyle are the two
most
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major catalysts of
obesity
.
This
 is clearly evidenced by countries experiencing rapid economic change.
For example
, in China, growing affluence has led people to consume more fast food and live more sedentary lifestyles.
This
trend
 moves in tandem with a steady growth in the number of overweight people.
Thus
, as
this
 makes clear, changing dietary practices and levels of activity are at the root of weight problems. The major
effects
 of
this
trend
 are entirely negative. As seen in the United States, growing
obesity
 rates lead to growing rates of life-threatening health problems,
such
 as diabetes, heart disease and high blood pressure.
For example
, Americans under 30 years of age are expected to have shorter lifespans than their parents, a biological phenomenon never experienced before in America.
Thus
,
it is clear that
 these
effects
 need to be countered to enhance the quality of life for future generations.
Following
this
 look at the causes and
effects
 of
obesity
, I feel that education is the single most important address to
this
 problem.
Thus
, to change
this
 disturbing global
trend
, I hope schools everywhere encourage healthy eating habits in children to help establish better health for the generation to come.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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