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It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving more important than spending in today’s world? Give reasons for your answer, and provide ideas and examples from your own

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Managing hard earned wages is a frequent concern of many. Personally, I feel that saving is a wiser option than
consuming total
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consuming, total
 income, and I will explain why.
Firstly
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, keeping money is considered a brilliant method to have a crucial fund whenever deplorable conditions
occur
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occur, such
such
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 as losing
job
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jobs
 or getting
illness
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ill
.
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, reserving a sum of money is not only beneficial for the owners but
also
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 for nurturing their offspring's development and learning which
are commonly regarded
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is commonly regarded
 as the foundation of one's life including properties, tuition fees,
cost
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the cost
 of eating....
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, frugality can bee seen as a good trait of many
people which
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people, which
 is thought as an inevitable part to make them become a role model for their kids
,
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,
as we all know " like father like son".
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, I myself believe that an emphasis on sensible saving should be a universal strategy now. I do understand the opposing view, there are lots of charges, ranging from utility bills to food payments and medical expenses.
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, after paying all living expenses wisely, It seems to me that having a financial emergency fund is extremely essential because of unforeseen circumstances
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 as Corona virus which have been destroying our planet for more than four months. To conclude, from my point of view, saving is the wiser option not just for financial but
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 for personal and political reasons. Being economical is a precious skill and a
buffet
(chemistry) an ionic compound that resists changes in its pH
buffer
 against uncertainty.
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