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Every country should produce enough of everything that the country needs so it should not rely on imports. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Since the arrival of globalization, most countries rely on imports to provide enough supplies for dwellers and increased productivity to boost their economy.
Therefore I
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Therefore, I
 disagree that every
country
 should produce enough needs so it doesn’t need to rely on imports anymore. Without a doubt that most of the developed countries produce their need by themselves and able to face any crisis that may occur in the future.
For example
, Australia has a large amount of food production because the
country
 has a good source of geography and a good source of weather.
Besides
, many countries have high-quality products due to the development of technology and machine to create more and more needs and services to the citizens of the
country
.
As a result
, they create more works and opportunities, reduce the unemployment rate but
also increase in production
Suggestion
also increase production
.
Moreover
, together with globalization, the excess products now can be provided to other countries to obtain foreign currency and keep their reputation in the worldwide market.
Furthermore
, international trade is a fundamental source of national income. As research on the GDP based on several developed countries, at least 30% of the national income derives from imports done internationally.
Consequently
, sparing exchanges of goods may occur to a dramatic decrease in the economy. To sum up, I disagree with the method that the
country
 should provide their needs, without imports, culture and the economy will be seriously damaged.
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