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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Nowadays, the
world
 is dominated by advertise. Adverts are on the internet, on the TV, in the street, public transport and on our mobile phones. The advertise is strategies to sell products or service.
However
, it can be considered immoral or unacceptable. In connection with, that advertising is a method of combating competition, so we cannot escape from it. The
world
 is too full an advert and
this
 cause for complaint people. Wherever we look can see the different advertisement and it will be too intrusive.
For instance
, we always use our mobile phones and receive a large number of advertising on the mobile phone when we read social media, play games, an SMS, emails. We can observe how children are influenced by the advert showing the latest toys, clothing or electronic products.
For instance
, children want to have
Iphone
Suggestion
an iPhone
iPhone
iPhones
IPhone
, PS due to it is a
world
 brand and
this
 can put enormous pressure on the parents to buy these products.
Furthermore
, some of the advertisements contain vulgar and obscene content that can badly influence the young minds and force them to go astray.
In addition
 to
this
, by using child actors in fast food, soft drinks and chocolate commercials, these companies try to attract the children.
As a result
, youngsters nowadays consume more fast food, soft-drinks and chocolates
instead
 of home cooked meals. In conclusion, I agree with many of the tactics used for adverting in today’s
world
 are both unacceptable and unethical because they are manipulative to people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unethical
  • Unacceptable
  • Deceptive
  • Exaggerated
  • Misleading
  • Manipulation
  • Vulnerable
  • Targeted advertising
  • Perpetuation
  • Societal norms
  • Stereotypes
  • Negative body image
  • Intrusion of privacy
  • Data-driven
  • Over-saturation
  • Desensitization
  • Annoyance
  • Greenwashing
  • Eco-conscious
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