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• It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is beer in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#city #life #beer #countryside
While some people hold the view that living in a city preferable.Others believe that living a country side worst idea. I agree with
first viewview
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the first view view
first view view
 because
life
 more comfortable, easy and urban town opens
door
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the door
 of a career
.
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.
 On the one hand, proponents of living in rural hold the view that
life
 in rural more beneficial sides.It is thought by many that rural places are very much peaceful. There is no traffic congestion or bottleneck. By living in country side one can enjoy the natural beauty of
such
 places like, pond, river mountains, farmlands and so on.
On the other hand
, some people believe and I agree, that city
life
 brings so many colossal benefits.
Firstly there
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Firstly, there
 are plenty of opportunities for job and doing business due to the proliferation of population and availability of big companies. People can earn more money and become wealthier by working hard.
As a result
, their social circle will Increase, which will really help them in their future career and business sphere.
Lastly
, the city
life
 offers so many luxuries and comforts which are not there in at the country side. In conclusion, people may vary in their opinion, but in my point of view, though the countryside brings joy of living in a soothing environment and less cost to live a composed-
life
, the development chances and opportunities to create wealth offered by urban towns are very much essential to consider.

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