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Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the past few decades, we can see that international sporting events like the Olympics and other sports events encourage
world
 peace and ease tensions in a safe way. Others argue that these events can lead to rivalry and emotional temperament that can lead to violence between countries. In my view, I partially agree that global events encourage sportsmanship, but do not encourage global unity.
Firstly
, it is true that
world
 cup events are used as a tool to show cast patriotic feelings in safe and secure ways;
however
, no matter the disputes between the countries, the athletes try to outperform each other in a friendly environment to spread the true spirit of the game.
In addition
, gatherings like the football matches is a platform for different people to interact and share experiences and love against each other.
For instance
, many experts seemed that contests are the best platform to show supremacy in violent free outcomes. Needless to say, global events encourage to ease international tension.
Secondly
,
although
 the tournaments positively affect
world
 peace, sometimes the athletes get carried away and end up hurting each other on or off the field.
Moreover
, pressure situation may make the spectators fight for their team and can lead to law and order problem.
For example
, cricket
world
 cup matches between rivalry countries like India and Pakistan matches most of the times led to violence in the audience.
Hence
, international events have their pitfalls and they cannot encourage global peace at all times. In conclusion, we can clearly understand despite the drawbacks sports events are the only best occasion to release international tensions in a friendly atmosphere and encourage friendship at all time.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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