Some people think that scientists and technology experts are more valued than musicians and artists. What is your opinion?

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A portion of people think musicians and artists are more
valueable
having great material or monetary value especially for use or exchange
valuable
available
than scientists and
technology
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experts. In
this
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essey
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
issue
we will discuss
importance
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the importance
of both categories of people Art is a reflection of
state
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a state
of mind. There are several options by which a person can express their thoughts and amuse the audience. Musicians and artists
are belongs
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have belonged
belong
to
this
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group. A musician creates music to entertain us.
On the other hand
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,
artist
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the artist
an artist
artists
can
crate
make or cause to be or to become
create
and produce numerous things
related our daily
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related to our daily
life
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.
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, people love to enjoy music during
workout
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a workout
workouts
the workout
.
In addition
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, people like to enjoy the radio while working. Nowadays, movies are part of our
life
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. All
this
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things
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thing
help
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helps
us to improve our mood and make our mind quite so we can balance our daily living. Apart from that, we
can not
can not
cannot
progress our civilization without scientists and
technology
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experts. They not only help us to advance our
society but
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society, but
also
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support us to explore the unknown.
Furthermore
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, these people
facilitates
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facilitate
our daily
life
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. Which leads to a
safe easy
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safe, easy
life
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.
Their
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They're
hard working contributes in each and every pillar of the society. Now we are living in
a
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an
age of
technology
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. We
are mostly depend
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mostly depend
are mostly depended
have mostly depended
are mostly depending
on it. The experts of
technology
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utilize the advantages of it and bring everything
on
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in
our palm.
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, due to the advancement of
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technology we
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technology, we
can study through online, attend online language classes to be
expert
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an expert
on
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in
a language and many more. Taking everything into account, I believe that everybody
are
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is
valueable
having great material or monetary value especially for use or exchange
valuable
available
for
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in
a society. During the
covid
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-19 pandemic situation we had seen scientists to prepare a the vaccine,
technology
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experts were
advanced
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advancing
the online system a lot and musicians and artists were entertained us to break the mental fatigue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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