You and some friends want to start a weekly dance club and you have found a place that would be suitable to hold your meetings. Write a letter to the owner of the hall. In your letter: explain your and your friends’ project ask if it is possible to rent the hall and under what terms state what day and what times you would like to use the hall.

Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing to propose a collaborative project with your
hall
and seek your approval to rent it. Recently, my friends and I, a group of college students and dance lovers, are planning to form a weekly dance club. After checking out various venues, we believe your
hall
is the best place for us to dance and carry out our meetings.
This
project aims at providing a safe space for young dancers to practise,
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their dancing skills, and
also
make friends. We will invite a coach to hold the class every week and launch a showcase once a year. The club will only be available for members and used for dancing
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. We would like to know if the
hall
is available to rent and the special terms for renting. We wish to hold our activities every Friday afternoon from 6PM to 9PM, three hours a week. Sunday morning would be our alternative ideal time period. We promise to take good care of your
hall
and keep it clean after
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. Please let me know if renting is possible. Your kindness and response are highly appreciated. Best Regards, Alice
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Ensure that each paragraph contains one central idea and that this idea is well-developed.
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Include a formal sign-off before your name to improve the professionalism of your letter closure.
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Make sure you cover all requirements from the prompt thoroughly.
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Provide clear, concise, and relevant details to support your request for better task achievement.
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Structure your letter in clear logical segments, including an introduction, body paragraphs each focusing on one aspect of the prompt, and a formal conclusion.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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