The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had acces between 1999 and 2004.

The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had acces between 1999 and 2004.
This
bar graph shows a compilation
about
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the statistics of rural and urban
household’s
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households’
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internet connection in an unreported European country between 1999 and 2004. It is known that
the
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online network and technological devices have been increasing a lot since 1999. Undoubtedly, there
were
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a significant expansion of
this
access in both categories. Indeed, discoveries and creations of facilities, devices, and infrastructure opened the opportunity for it.
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, the large production reduced the prices of the necessary equipment and the chance
to
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these products
be
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available, including in rural areas.
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, the increase in
city's
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household’s cyberspace approach was bigger than in rural areas, mainly between 1999 and 2003. In 2004,
the
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urban’s access was bigger, but in a less proportion.
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, it is easier to install and sell computers and internet
network
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networks
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in big cities and surroundings than in the countryside
due to
the infrastructure. Briefly,
accordingly
with
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the
graph
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there was a valid increment in access of families to cyberspace from 1999 to 2004, mainly in metropolitan areas.
This
intensification might have been explained by the technology development and infrastructure.

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