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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

#college #students #home #parents
To live with your parents or yourself?
This
 issue has always been relevant for college students and their families. Let's look at the pros and cons of
this
 question. When you live far from your parents, you learn to be independent, you cook for yourself
,
Accept space
,
clean and in the future these skills will be useful to you. You
also
 have more freedom, it's harder for your parents to control you. But there are
also
 negative sides, because having a lot of freedom some students can go downhill, start a lot of walking, stop studying. Personally, I am currently studying in college, and live separately from my parents for 4 years, I like it. Of course, at times I miss them and would like to see them more often. But in
general I
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general, I
 feel independent and adult which is very cool.
On the other hand
, living with your parents is
also
 very good. You always spend a lot of time with them, they're less nervous about where you are and what's wrong with you. You have less housework, you always have something to eat. Of the cons I would like to say that you can not always do and do what you want, sit at home with friends, listen to loud music or go at night to the disco. Everywhere there are pros and cons. I believe that it depends individually on each person and on the willingness of parents to let their child go.

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