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Nowadays, many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays, many schools are finding it profitable to sell unhealthy
food
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 and sugary drinks to students during
lunch
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 breaks. In my opinion,
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 is a negative development to students health and
growth
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. It is acceptable that students eat junk foods like french fries or potato chips as snacks, but it is unacceptable that they eat these for
lunch
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. Students who have
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 an unhealthy
diet
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 will get side effects like obesity and high blood pressure, which will lead them to diabetes, heart attacks, or even cancer. It is important that students have a healthy
diet
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 as it affect their
growth
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. If students have junk
food
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 for
lunch
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, they will not be able to absorb the nutrients they need for
growth
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. Having an unhealthy
diet
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 will
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 cause students' lack of concentration as they are unable to receive any vitamins or minerals. Apart from body
growth
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, a healthy
diet
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also affect
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also affects
 the development of teenagers' brain. Due to the fact that the reward system in their brain consider eating those tasty junk
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food
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foods
 as a rewarding behaviour, it will make them want to carry out the behaviour again.
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, their unhealthy, eat habit will lead them to poor self-control. It is the school's responsibility to set up a model and guide students in the right path. Their main priority should be students
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 of money. In conclusion, it is inadequate to sell unhealthy
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 during
lunch
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 breaks as it affects students' health and
growth
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. Hello, I'm in my office at the moment.
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