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some people say that art (e.g.: painting, poetry, music) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can be made by those with special ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people say that
art
 can be made by every single person while others think it is god gifted. In my opinion,
art
 is more likely good gifted but every person can polish their skills by having practice, even though it doesn't exist by birth in them. The majority of the world's population doesn't have any special ability in
art but there are
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art, but there are
 many people who come forward in
this
 area by doing hard work, at
first
 it starts simply by like any other activity for them but slowly and slowly they get attached to it by heart. Nurture of
art
 all depends upon how much somebody is devoted towards it. There are many artists in the world who started from zero, which means they were not even having natural
art but
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art, but
 by their determination and hard work they shined like a star. Where as who are born with some kind of special
art
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artistic
 ability, it may be in music, poetry, painting and any other, they might not need to do a lot of hard work to become successful. Natural artist has one big advantage that god has given them all the resources to become a successful person, they just need to use those resources wisely. To conclude,
art
 can be made by everybody if they are attached to it by heart, by working hard to develop their skills, but it might be much easier for them who have natural
art
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artistic
 talent.

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