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Nowadays it is not only large companies that can make films. Digital technology enables anyone to produce films. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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According to the
development
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 of digital technology, the
film
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 industry has been expanded so we can see not only movies from famous studios but
also
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 films from anyone capable of making films. I personally suppose that
this
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development
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 could have both positive and negative. On the one hand, everyone has the ability to produce films that would be seen as positive for some reasons.
Firstly
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,
films industry
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the film industry
film industry
 can meet a higher level in quality due to
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development
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.
For instance
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, when many people attempt to produce films, it can create a competitive market where filmmakers have to increase their
film
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’s quality.
Secondly
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, people need a team to produce films so many freelancers can get a
jobs
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job
. As an example, make-up artists play an important role to manufacture a
film
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.
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, a large number of filmmakers can bring some troubles. Some people pay almost their attention to make the
film
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 become popular
instead
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 of making the
film
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 become artwork. To be more precious, some filmmakers manufacture films contain inappropriate contents
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 as violence or sexual films to find fame. If a topic is exploited too much to make movies, it will be boring for viewers.
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, the subject about zombies is familiar with us so movies on
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 subject usually won’t get much attention. To conclude, the
development
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 of filmmakers can bring advantages and disadvantages to
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film industry
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the film industry
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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