The graph shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012.

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illustrates how many children, divided by gender, played six kinds of sports (tennis, badminton, cycling, swimming,

football

and hockey) in a town in England in 2012.

Overall

, the number of

boys

playing

sport

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exceeded that of

girls

in the given period and the

sport

with the most significant difference between the genders was

football

Football

was

also

the most popular

sport

for

boys

while

the majority of

girls

preferred swimming.

Furthermore

, both males and females least preferred playing hockey. There were four sports in which

boys

participated more than

girls

While

boys

played

football

, the number of

girls

playing that

sport

was considerably lower (around 20). With regards to tennis, the figure (4) for

boys

who played that

sport

was 50 as opposed to just under 40 for

girls

Similarly

, more

boys

cycled than

girls

(approximately 35 and 20 respectively). The difference, in terms of hockey, was minimal with only about 5 more

boys

playing that

sport

than

girls

On the other hand

, more

girls

took part in the two remaining sports which both showed a difference of about 10 between the genders. As many as 50

girls

preferred swimming in comparison to 40

girls

for badminton.

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6Linking words
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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The graph shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012.

Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is sometimes argued that too many students go to university, while others claim that a university education should be a universal right.

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