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Advantages and disadvantages of spending free time.

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Spending free time right is the good rest. I assume that everyone wants to have sufficient free moment, because they simply would like to vacation.
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, there are a lot of benefits of spending leisure hours as not work.
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, if your vacation is long, you will rapidly become unproductive in a year. There are a lot of reasons why, but I will talk only about some of them. On the one hand, as I mentioned, you can just get the rest after hard-working day. It is a very obvious reason, but it has got permission to exist.
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, you can go for a walk with friends or alone to get some fresh air and maybe talk to people. Many people suppose that working at a free time is absurd,
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, I think that If your deals are related to your hobby, you can enjoy working on that term.
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, unless you do work as you laze, you will definitely become laze. In the most cases, people cannot control themselves and stop spending that moment.
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, some people, like myself, cannot stop watching Netflix or exciting films.
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, your relax will not useful for you. You should have taught how to manage your hours before spending your spare present to waste. I recommend to read about stage management, especially in your near spare occasion. It can provide your understanding of correctly planning your affairs. In conclusion, there are a lot of both advantages and disadvantages, so each person should learn more about time management. Personally, I prefer to spend that moment learning new about English and improving knowledges of mathematics.
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