The society would benefit from a ban all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose and can even been damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that advertising has a negative impact on our society;

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, it should be prohibited. In my opinion,

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it can be harmful to the audiences in some ways, its benefits are countless. Obviously, advertisements manipulate people to sell their products.

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, it is common to realize that buyers are usually attracted to buy more than what they truly need because advertisements are extremely persuasive. A good example for

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the high sales of

Iphone

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. Despite its ridiculous price, people pour their money to possess the latest model.

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, both paper and televised

advertising promote

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advertising, promote

a wide range of fast food and soft drink with their delicious tastes and convenience, especially aim

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children and busy employees. As the result, these foods have made people living unhealthily and raised the rate of obesity among the citizens.

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, there is no doubt that consumers have a number of benefits from watching advertisements. The most advantage is that people can have many choices for a product because advertising shows a range of different brands and prices. Customers just need to choose the most suitable to their need and income.

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, advertising has become a form of art, so people really enjoy watching them. Many advertisements have ear-catching music and funny moments which make people more enjoyable rather disturbing. My niece,

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, loves singing along the advertisement of Vinamilk because they have some cows which are able to sing and dance. In conclusion, it is undeniable that all forms of advertising pose some certain dangers to the

society but

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society, but

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have some benefits as mentioned.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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267 words

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consumerism
materialism
unnecessary expenditure
critical source
informed choices
misleading
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survival
target audience
environmental degradation
disposal
art and expression
social and cultural value
commercial intent
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The society would benefit from a ban all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose and can even been damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both there views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only governments actions can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some think that Interviews are not reliable way for hiring employees. It is important to apply other methods for this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?