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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a topical debate whether the schools should offer students the academic subjects only, and other practical skills
such
 as cooking and dressing should not be in the curriculum.
Although
 academic results have a tremendous value for the undergraduates, I opt for the idea when
nontheorectical
 subjects are
also
 considerable at school. Admittedly, to pursue tertiary education and to be accepted to a top-tier institution, school-leavers must pass the exam with the flying
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
.
This
 means the schools themselves have to mainly focus on teaching students what needed for the tests.
Furthermore
, students who have graduated from a famous university are likely to have a chance to get a lucrative salary as they come to work. In my country, many enterprises require their applicants to hold a certain degree for their managerial levels, so only the qualified candidates are able to get the job. The practical skills
such
 as cooking or dressing,
however
, are
also
 needed for their lives;
therefore
, schools should provide their undergraduates with the basic survival courses apart from the academic program. An astonishing number of young adults nowadays do not want to live independently from their families because they cannot take care of themselves.
Furthermore
, it is meaningless to force the students to pursue higher education if they do not want to. Some students are not interested in studying, they may find these vocational courses useful. These
such
 skills may be the
first
 step for them to realize which talents they possess. In conclusion,
although
 I comprehensively understand why people argue schools are the place where only the academic programs are taught, I
also
 believe other skills
such
 as cooking or dressing should have their place at school.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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