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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities.To what extend do you agree and disagree?

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What is meant by distance learning? Well, due to the world's technological advancements, distance learning Is a modern way for students to grasp information through the internet. Nowadays, it's been argued that many folks disagree with the idea of studying at home through technology, as they assume that it’s not as beneficial as attending universities. To embark with, universities' and colleges' main aim is not just memorizing words from the textbook. Its main idea is to learn how to communicate and interact with each other, and prepare the students for the real world.
Also
, not all professions can be studied online. Some need a
face
 to
face
 conversation
, to not just
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, not just
learn but
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learn, but
 gain experience through that process.
Moreover
, the study environment in class can be controlled and the teachers can monitor the students during learning hours. But if it
were
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was
 at home, professors and teachers aren’t able to maintain the student's focus. Because students can get themselves distracted by simple things
such
 as phones, laptops, iPods, etc. As I mentioned before, having a good social life is a must, and that could be gained in universities. But if it were online learning, it could isolate the individual from society.
That is
 to say, they become an introvert type of people, and
this
 leads to a lack of confidence and many problems for themselves later on in life.
Consequently
,
this
 damages their career opportunities. In conclusion,
although
 online learning can be done in the comforts of their home,
face
 to
face
 learning provides far more than what textbooks can give. As I
therefore
 believe, colleges not only helps you with the basics, but lets you understand how to expand your knowledge to your advantage.

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