Some people suggest that sport helps people learn about teamwork, but others say it can encourage to be too competitive. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

Sport is kind of a game,
competition
or activity needing physical effort and
skill
that is
played or completed according to the rule in order to entertain or practice. Some people believe that playing sports
helps
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will help
people build
teamwork
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teamwork, skill
skill
for
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in
their work in the future;
however
, others say it may inspire to be too competitive. In my opinion, sports might be responsible for extremely high
competition
in some special cases, but it
also
plays an important role in guiding teamwork
skill
.
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.
Firstly
, some players
are involved
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is involved
in a competitive sport in order that they can entertain or be good for health without caring about the prize, but others want to win the
first
prize.
Hence
, when their ambition to become winners is really too strong, they may compete unfairly.
For instance
, in 2019 AFC- U23
Championship where
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Championships, where
Championships where
some soccer player
were punished
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was punished
because of their unfriendly
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. On the other hands, thanks to
competition
players may have a determination to complete their games or activities.
Secondly
, players can know ways to work with other people through being a
members
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member
of a team
.
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.
It
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It's
clear that most of members in a team will collaborate with others to play or complete their games.
Thirdly
, being a team help people be more responsible because they will target more on their team’s goal
.
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.
For example
,
last
year, when I took part in a cooking
competition
in my school with other members, we discussed about what we tended to cook, and assigned duties for each
members
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member
to prepare.
In addition
, we learned the way to get on well with others to realize our main goal. Luckily, after the
competition we
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competition, we
have been close friends. In my opinion,
teamwork
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teamwork, skill
skill
can be taught
for
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to
players while they are involved in activities or
competition
.
Although
that
competition
appears in sport can be changed for the better, it might be too competitive.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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